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Discussion in 'The Vapor Lounge' started by GSR, Jul 21, 2014.

  1. GSR

    GSR New Member

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    I wanna make this thread for all the rappers and poets we have here on FC. Whether you wanna throw up some text, share an audio, or set up collabs with fellow FC MC'S, this should be the spot. We can share verses and give feedback to each other here.

    To start this off, i'll break the ice by throwing up a very old song of mine. I'm the first guy

    https://soundcloud.com/this_is_gsr/get-by-gsr-ft-atg


    Thanks to @Deja Vu and @Terpenoid for inspiring me to create this thread. If either of you throw up a freestyle, im more than willing to reply. Any excuse to write just helps me improve :spliff:
     
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  2. Deja Vu

    Deja Vu Deviant fetish sex

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    heres one I sent to Terpenoid. I like it :) feels nice to recite

    I could rap it fast or slow, but either way the wayward tide of rhyming structures means destruction of the notes. Knowledge comes with solace, and the petals and the foliage fall like snow upon your soul, and the parts of you that aren't you are the parts that have to go. Lately, the attitude I've been endorsing is coursing through my veins even harder than the web of dawning foresight that I'm caught in.


    I've got some more to share when stuff at home gets sorted out and I can go get my notebooks
     
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  3. GSR

    GSR New Member

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    I was taking a class on the evolution of jazz, and the teacher, Mr. Bernhardt, ended up being the director of the band. I told him i was a rapper, and he asked to see my work so he can determine if im worth working with, so i wrote this up:

    Music is the beat of the heart
    this is passion that im seekin, that im reachin in art
    Speakin this hard whenever I be preachin these bars
    Because this is all raw emotion I release when I spar
    Keepin my guard, cuz ive been hit with a proposition
    To plot a written on compositions that could spot me rippin
    next to bernhardt...
    I’ll disperse scars over hard trumpets
    or I’ll keep it smoothe with the groove and keep the crowd thumpin
    hearts bumpin, but not on tune with the radio
    drop a crazy flow, just to make that nice jay z dough?
    *scoff* Thinkin that is just rude son
    I never tried to be a speaker just to hear myself through one
    Truth comes through this rappers rhyme complexity
    Perfected the recipe. Bestin the rhymes im sendin be
    So Impossible.
    You can not drop a flow how I rock it yo
    Cuz I seize the goals that Ive placed in front of my opticals


    Theres more, but i dont wanna spam you guys with too much at once lol
     
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  4. Deja Vu

    Deja Vu Deviant fetish sex

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    All good! Got a good momentum going!

    It may just be me; but in my head, this part would have sounded better like this.

    Seems more dramatic, hard hitting, and gives the verse a bit of a break or a pause so that the rest can flow more smoothly.

    Also in my head I imagined it playing to a Pretty Lights beat. Funky, intense shit!

    very good man, i enjoyed those lyrics
     
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  5. samantabha

    samantabha climbing the mountain of the mind Company Rep

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    LIke the smooth alliteration....."Knowledge comes with solace, and the petals and the foliage fall like snow upon your soul, and the parts of you that aren't you are the parts that have to go.
    And the message is perfect.
     
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  6. Terpenoid

    Terpenoid Active Member

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    One I've already shared with Deja Vu and GSR. Sort of a spoken word story.

    The darkness broke as the kraken awoke and arose from the black smoke at the depths of the vast ocean, somewhere near where the plates meet in the middle a cave embraces the creature that's stayed in stasis for eons, dormant aside from the occasional meal and noises that's heard but usually labeled volcano or iceberg cracking or running aground, when truthfully it's the kraken's slumbering sound, only woken by pole shift once a millennia, name spoken in cold breath the summit of predators from the depths of the ocean where no man has ventured, stay tuned for the next programmed adventure

    This time on the kraken the creature begins to writhe before its rise from the blackness, it's time for some practice before it sets it's eyes on a battleship, eating some deep sea creatures, tube worms from Jules Verne TV features, but people's its main weakness, sustained on pain, dismay, and chaos, building its strength from the onset for the onslaught, its tentacles sought all movement, caught whatever it chose and chewed it, destroying the rest, resolved to void all life in the depths before it's wiping the decks of aircraft carriers, smashing tomcats, helicopters, and harriers, hells spawn the waters fraught with terror here

    Back in action with the kraken, last time we left it it was snacking, now it's on assent on the scent of calamity, sensing war on the surface, searching to serve it's purpose in the anarchy, pandemonium reins supreme here, the sea creature could see and feel fear, and thrived on it, in fact it relied on it for its strength, it fuelled its fire on its journey till the end, the pendulum swings the clock ticks on impending doom, apocalyptic thoughts hard wired in its fibre, the nucleus of hatred, prehistories survivor risen for cataclysm or the collapse of environments, now it feels the destruction of mans creation and knows that it's the moment it's been waiting for with patience

    Atop the water there was madness, the kraken broke the surface amongst sea serpents and battleships, a million casualties is just some extra calories the kraken snapped them out of the water with ease, as the battle waged a cavalcade of ships capsized amidst the waves, the perfect place for life to meet a watery grave, it sensed a warship on approach the kraken dove moving towards the boat, arose from below it crushing the hull in its eight enormous tentacles, the fate of the sailors was inevitable, a clever foe to say the least but every man for miles turned his gaze upon the beast, releasing nearly every ammunition, has the kraken met his final day? Await the next edition
     
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  7. samantabha

    samantabha climbing the mountain of the mind Company Rep

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    Terpenoid, I found myself talking your lines aloud here at work.....
     
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  8. Terpenoid

    Terpenoid Active Member

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    haha, Thanks Samantabha!

    I hope it sounded good... lol
     
  9. Curiousone

    Curiousone Well-Known Member

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    Nice.

    Hmm...might have to post some of my songs...later.

    I've hung up the mic for a few years, but the Baby Bottle keeps calling me, lol. Good idea for a thread.
     
  10. Terpenoid

    Terpenoid Active Member

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    I made this song with my phone and computer

     

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